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Tuesday, 25 July 2017

Immersion Assembly writing.

Immersion Assembly

Welcome back! Who is excited for this term? We are going to leap into writing by creating some exciting recounts about our immersion assembly!
WALT: plan for our writing

When we plan, we need to think about:
  • Who our audience is.
  • How we are going hook this audience in - how are we going to capture their attention in a creative way?
  • How we are going to create a description of the event which makes our audience feel like they were at the event too.
  • How we are going to keep our audience interested as they read.

Step 1: Brainstorm.
What you could include:
  • Descriptive words
  • Ideas for a hook
  • Key things you can remember from the assembly
    • What you enjoyed
    • What made you laugh

Step 2: Plan your own recount (double click on the drawing below).


Step 3: Write your recount! Click here to read a model recount.
Transition Words
Past tense
First...
Next...
Soon...
During…
While...
After...
Later...
At first…
Initially…
Once we…
Once I…
At last…
Finally…
In the end…
You should be telling the audience what has already happened since we have already had Immersion Assembly!

E.g.
Watched
Had
Saw
laughed
If you can think of any others, use them! This is just to get you started.

Start writing here:

When we walked into assembly we were going to sit down when we sat down we saw stars on the roof. The stars where blue and they were shining the door we walked in to sit down was bitched black.

Be for team 1 showed their performance Mr Somerville  and Mr Jacobson flew the drone into the hall because when Mr somerville landed it on the stage he waited for 5 second then the two  aliens came out of the drone and tried to kill Mr Somerville and Mr Jacobson tried to kill the two aliens too. After they were trying to kill each other Mr somerville killed the first alien then Mr Jacobson killed the other alien.

Team 1 went first to show all the kids and teachers their performance it wasn’t the kids that did it it was the teacher’s that did it  the teachers did on the holiday.

The best performance i loved was team 5 team 5 is the seniors mrs judd sang how far i’ll go but she added some other interesting word to make it not sound just like  moana.

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